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English 10-1 · The literary essay

One point, proved from the text

An essay is not a report on a book. It is a claim you make and then prove — and the most common failure is an essay that proves nothing because it spends its length retelling.

The words, first

The idea: Thesis, topic and summary are three different things.

WordWhat it means
ThesisAn arguable claim the essay sets out to prove. If nobody could reasonably disagree, it is not one.
TopicWhat you are writing about. A thesis is what you are saying about it.
Topic sentenceThe paragraph's point, in one sentence, at the top.
EvidenceSpecific material from the text — a short embedded quotation or a precise detail.
AnalysisThe explanation of how the evidence supports the point. Longer than the quotation.
SummaryRetelling what happens. Not analysis, and not worth marks on its own.
Literary presentWriting about a text in the present tense: Macbeth kills Duncan.
Counter-argumentA reasonable objection, raised and answered.

Building a thesis

The idea: Test it by asking whether someone could sensibly take the other side.

Thesisthe claim the whole essay provesClaim 1evidence → analysis → link backClaim 2evidence → analysis → link backClaim 3evidence → analysis → link backConclusionwhat the pattern means beyond the textRead only thetopic sentencesIf they tell the story in order,the essay has slipped intosummary. If they read as anargument, it has not.
Thesis at the top, and every paragraph hanging from it. A paragraph that does not connect back is doing no work, however well written it is.

Compare four openings.

  • “Macbeth was written by Shakespeare around 1606.” — a fact.
  • “This essay will discuss ambition in Macbeth.” — an announcement.
  • “Macbeth is a play about ambition.” — a topic.
  • “Ambition in Macbeth becomes destructive once it is severed from conscience.” — a thesis: arguable, and it points at the evidence that would prove it.

Choosing a text. Familiarity beats prestige every time. An essay on a short story you know closely will outscore a vague essay on a famous novel you half remember.

The paragraph that scores

The idea: Point, evidence, analysis, link. Four moves, and the third is the longest.

Introducewhere we areQuotethe shortest phraseAnalyzewhy it proves the claimLinkback to the ideathe widest box is the one that earns the marks
Set the quotation up, embed it in your own sentence, then explain what it shows. A quotation dropped in as a sentence of its own leaves the marker to guess why it is there — and guessing is not marking.

Macbeth's language turns hollow as his ambition is satisfied. By the final act he describes life as “a walking shadow”, reducing a whole existence to something insubstantial and borrowed — a shadow has no body of its own and disappears when the light moves. The image is the opposite of the vivid, physical language he used when he still wanted the crown, and the contrast measures what the wanting cost him.

Point, evidence embedded mid-sentence, analysis twice as long as the quotation, and a link that restates the thesis in the paragraph's own terms.

The ratio. If more than a quarter of the paragraph is quotation, it has stopped being your argument.

The retelling test. Would someone who had not read the text learn what you think, or only what happens? If it is the second, it is summary.

Conventions and correctness

The idea: Correctness is assessed in its own right, and the errors that cost most are the ones a five-minute read-through catches.

He hesitatescomplete sentencehe is afraidcomplete sentencefull stopHe hesitates. He is afraid.semicolonHe hesitates; he is afraid.comma + and, but, soHe hesitates, but he is afraid.subordinatorHe hesitates because he is afraid.a comma aloneHe hesitates, he is afraid. — comma spliceFour ways to join two sentences — a bare comma is not one
Comma splices and run-ons are the most common sentence errors in a timed essay. Knowing the four legitimate ways to join two independent clauses removes most of them.
ConventionRule
TenseLiterary present: Macbeth kills Duncan, not killed
TitlesNovels and plays in italics; short stories and poems in quotation marks
AuthorFull name at first mention, surname afterwards
QuotationsEmbedded and punctuated as part of your sentence
RegisterFormal, but not inflated — precision beats vocabulary

What costs marks

The idea: One of these accounts for more lost marks than the rest together.

  • Retelling the plot. Summary shows what happens; analysis shows what it means.
  • Dropping quotations in without explaining them.
  • A thesis nobody could disagree with.
  • Slipping out of the literary present halfway through.

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